Wishing Continuum(55er)


Even tide under moonlight, the car wheels on the asphalt passing by the street signs.

She leans on and kisses him, her eyes glistening when he kisses back.

She whispers, “Wish I could freeze this moment forever”.

Luminance strengthens, blaring sounds of horn increases and the car comes to a clamoring halt.

Under the truck.

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13 comments

  1. Prajakta · May 5, 2011

    Ah!Nicely written.

    Be careful what you wish for.

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  2. Pheno Menon · May 9, 2011

    ok that was scary… but very well written

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  3. Pheno Menon · May 9, 2011

    I just posted a picture and poem. Let me know if you like it…

    Disaaray

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  4. amarajajoo · May 11, 2011

    A tragedy told in 55 words! It’s always a little hard to write 55 fiction ( at least for me ) but I’m sure i can take lessons from what you wrote and i just read.

    Keep Writing 🙂

    Amar 🙂

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    • psychopneuma · May 11, 2011

      Thank you so much!!!! =)

      Yeah it’s difficult alright! My first(hopefully not last) attempt!

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  5. Kunal C · May 11, 2011

    Everytime I visit your site, you have changed either the theme or background 🙂 Dont understand why you just have one post excerpt on home page.. doesnt look good..

    btw nice post.. short and simple and lots to say and ponder..

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    • psychopneuma · May 11, 2011

      my homepage just has the current post hence the one post per page. And the theme changes, well I just happen to be the kid with 10 chocolates in front of her and having to choose one! O_o

      Thanks for the read!

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      • Kunal · May 11, 2011

        hehehe.. kid with great thoughts.. 🙂

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  6. kevin · May 11, 2011

    Bravo vraiment génial ! Tout un exploit ! 55 mots qui une étanche contrainte !
    Personnellement, je serai trouve qu’il est difficile de faire ce que u ont arraché, pour moi plus l’ mots ,more is flow of emotion and feeling , mais qui juste moi 🙂

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